Resume new Look
^ ^ (make changes as needed to that page) Hey team! So I added to the resume on the second page the dates, since i believe a company will want to see the time that Sylvia had with each job. I also included more of the job responsibilities to the jobs that she has had. I included a reference part since a interviewee will ask for those. Moreover, instead of "this"company on the objective part, I changed it to "a reputable company". I agreed with all of the other terms. I also added President of the Panhellenic League and 3.0 GPA to the education background. We're getting it together :). -Jessica G.
-- Added more info and details for each job sylvia had.
We have decided it will be easier to discuss ideas in the discussion area, and work on the new resume on the page that Christine M. made. The link for the page is below- tilted "Resume New Look".
Resume Rewrite Great Start for the rest of us to jump on!!
(G. Moon)
Sylvia's resume first needs items regrouped and some eliminated.
1) I would remove the items in the Personal section completely.
2) I would remove everything in the Education section except the statement of her degree.
3) I'd combine the two Fisher Scientific listings into one.
4) I'd convert the paragraphs (that are narrative style) into bulleted lists of responsibilities and achievements.
(I'll let someone else take it from here! - Gary)
One more note: Some items in her "Personal" section could also be listed as "Achievements" if they are seen as a benefit to demonstrate a skill. (Except for the part about "Hoggies." Unless she raises pigs, that is!)
H. Schultz:
I agree with what Gary said. The personal section, especially her height and weight, need to be removed. Her hobbies really don't have anything to do with the position she is searching for, so I think they can be removed also. I think the "Chronological Resume" would be the best to use in this situation since she has a lot of work history, and her Biology degree has nothing to do with her career objective. I will move the education section below the work history. What does everyone think about putting the 3.0 GPA on the resume? Also, should we keep that she was the President of the Panhellenic League (it does show responsibility and leadership)? I will complete Gary's step 1 and 2 for right now:
(G. Moon) Great idea on the Chronological Resume - but do you still think that the Fisher listings should be two separate listings?
Are we discussing this here on the wiki page or in the discussion tab? I would change and take out the dates and some of the wording well all the wording. by removing the two redundant Fisher Scientific Instruments to one. and reorganizing the lay out it is much simpler to read for future employer. A lot of the taken out information can be gained through an interview. She could add other catergories to this resume though. Please go to next page, use link Resume new Look Christine M.
(Y. Weinstein) The job objective seems very general to me. I think it needs to more specific as to what kind of job she is looking for and how she can help the company. I know others have suggested combining the two Fisher Instruments listings but I think it is better left as two separate items. The two listings are for totally different jobs and it shows growth in the company. You guys have covered alot of ground and those are the only two changes I could see for right now.
(R.Haskins)
Hi all,
I bit confusing because of the resume being located in two places. However, if the "new look" resume is the current one, then some suggestions:
1) Take out "reputable" company from subject line. Also, Marketing & Sales can be two very different department depending on the organization. If Sylvia is sending in a resume, it should be for a specific position and not general.
2) Combining her work history with Fisher Scientific is good, and it also shows advancement in the company. (I think someone also mentioned that).
3) There are no employment gaps in her resume which is good. But she have to discuss why she wants to leave Fisher after 9 years, and obvious career pathing.
4) The GPA isn't necessary, because she isn't applying for a job in Biology. A recruiter wouldn't ask, but she could carry her transcripts to the interview if it come up.
Best,
Ron
(J. Young)
1. The new look resume needs to be altered so that all headings are uniform. The headings which are Objective, Experience and Education background need to be all the same size, font and style
2. I would also add in Professional Experience and focus on the work that she has currently done which will apply to the job she is interested in. If professional experience is used this can eliminate some previous work which will allow for more detailed job descriptions
3. I would also place GPA ,if appropriate, under the education heading
4. Center personal information on the top of the resume
Sylvia Manchester
765 Belle Fleur Blvd.
New Orleans, LA 70113
(504) 312-9504 smanchester@rcnmail.com
JOB OBJECTIVE: To obtain a responsible position in marketing or sales where my experience in sales, customer service and marketing can be utilized to help the organization.
WORK EXPERIENCE
Fisher Scientific Instruments, 2004 to now, field sales representative. Responsible for calling on customers and explaining the features of Fisher’s line of laboratory instruments. Also responsible for writing sales letters, attending trade shows, and preparing weekly sales reports.
Fisher Scientific Instruments, 2001-2003, customer service representative. Was responsible for handling incoming phone calls from customers who had questions about delivery, quality, or operation of Fisher’s line of laboratory instruments. Also handled miscellaneous correspondence with customers.
Medical Electronics, Inc., 1998-2001, administrative assistant to the vice president of marketing. In addition to handling typical secretarial chores for the vice president of marketing, I was in charge of compiling the monthly sales reports, using figures provided by members of the field sales force. I also was given responsibility for doing various market research activities.
New Orleans Convention and Visitors Bureau, 1995-1998, summers, tour guide. During the summers of my college years, I led tours of New Orleans for tourists visiting the city. My duties included greeting conventioneers and their spouses at hotels, explaining the history and features of the city during an all-day sightseeing tour, and answering questions about New Orleans and its attractions. During my fourth summer with the bureau, I was asked to help train the new tour guides. I prepared a handbook that provided interesting facts about the various tourist attractions, as well as answers to the most commonly asked tourist questions. The Bureau was so impressed with the handbook they had it printed up so that it could be given as a gift to visitors.
University of Louisiana, 1995-1998, part-time clerk in admissions office. While I was a student in college, I worked 15 hours a week in the admissions office. My duties included filing, processing applications, and handling correspondence with high school students and administrators.
EDUCATION: BA degree in biology. University of Louisiana, 1998. Graduated with a 3.0 average. President of Panhellenic League.
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^ (make changes as needed to that page)
Hey team!
So I added to the resume on the second page the dates, since i believe a company will want to see the time that Sylvia had with each job. I also included more of the job responsibilities to the jobs that she has had. I included a reference part since a interviewee will ask for those. Moreover, instead of "this"company on the objective part, I changed it to "a reputable company". I agreed with all of the other terms. I also added President of the Panhellenic League and 3.0 GPA to the education background.
We're getting it together :). -Jessica G.
-- Added more info and details for each job sylvia had.
We have decided it will be easier to discuss ideas in the discussion area, and work on the new resume on the page that Christine M. made.
The link for the page is below- tilted "Resume New Look".
Resume Rewrite Great Start for the rest of us to jump on!!
(G. Moon)
Sylvia's resume first needs items regrouped and some eliminated.
1) I would remove the items in the Personal section completely.
2) I would remove everything in the Education section except the statement of her degree.
3) I'd combine the two Fisher Scientific listings into one.
4) I'd convert the paragraphs (that are narrative style) into bulleted lists of responsibilities and achievements.
(I'll let someone else take it from here! - Gary)
One more note: Some items in her "Personal" section could also be listed as "Achievements" if they are seen as a benefit to demonstrate a skill. (Except for the part about "Hoggies." Unless she raises pigs, that is!)
H. Schultz:
I agree with what Gary said. The personal section, especially her height and weight, need to be removed. Her hobbies really don't have anything to do with the position she is searching for, so I think they can be removed also. I think the "Chronological Resume" would be the best to use in this situation since she has a lot of work history, and her Biology degree has nothing to do with her career objective. I will move the education section below the work history. What does everyone think about putting the 3.0 GPA on the resume? Also, should we keep that she was the President of the Panhellenic League (it does show responsibility and leadership)? I will complete Gary's step 1 and 2 for right now:
(G. Moon)
Great idea on the Chronological Resume - but do you still think that the Fisher listings should be two separate listings?
Are we discussing this here on the wiki page or in the discussion tab? I would change and take out the dates and some of the wording well all the wording. by removing the two redundant Fisher Scientific Instruments to one. and reorganizing the lay out it is much simpler to read for future employer. A lot of the taken out information can be gained through an interview. She could add other catergories to this resume though. Please go to next page, use link Resume new Look Christine M.
(Y. Weinstein)
The job objective seems very general to me. I think it needs to more specific as to what kind of job she is looking for and how she can help the company.
I know others have suggested combining the two Fisher Instruments listings but I think it is better left as two separate items. The two listings are for totally different jobs and it shows growth in the company.
You guys have covered alot of ground and those are the only two changes I could see for right now.
(R.Haskins)
Hi all,
I bit confusing because of the resume being located in two places. However, if the "new look" resume is the current one, then some suggestions:
1) Take out "reputable" company from subject line. Also, Marketing & Sales can be two very different department depending on the organization. If Sylvia is sending in a resume, it should be for a specific position and not general.
2) Combining her work history with Fisher Scientific is good, and it also shows advancement in the company. (I think someone also mentioned that).
3) There are no employment gaps in her resume which is good. But she have to discuss why she wants to leave Fisher after 9 years, and obvious career pathing.
4) The GPA isn't necessary, because she isn't applying for a job in Biology. A recruiter wouldn't ask, but she could carry her transcripts to the interview if it come up.
Best,
Ron
(J. Young)
1. The new look resume needs to be altered so that all headings are uniform. The headings which are Objective, Experience and Education background need to be all the same size, font and style
2. I would also add in Professional Experience and focus on the work that she has currently done which will apply to the job she is interested in. If professional experience is used this can eliminate some previous work which will allow for more detailed job descriptions
3. I would also place GPA ,if appropriate, under the education heading
4. Center personal information on the top of the resume
Sylvia Manchester
765 Belle Fleur Blvd.
New Orleans, LA 70113
(504) 312-9504
smanchester@rcnmail.com
JOB OBJECTIVE: To obtain a responsible position in marketing or sales where my experience in sales, customer service and marketing can be utilized to help the organization.
WORK EXPERIENCE
Fisher Scientific Instruments, 2004 to now, field sales representative. Responsible for calling on customers and explaining the features of Fisher’s line of laboratory instruments. Also responsible for writing sales letters, attending trade shows, and preparing weekly sales reports.
Fisher Scientific Instruments, 2001-2003, customer service representative. Was responsible for handling incoming phone calls from customers who had questions about delivery, quality, or operation of Fisher’s line of laboratory instruments. Also handled miscellaneous correspondence with customers.
Medical Electronics, Inc., 1998-2001, administrative assistant to the vice president of marketing. In addition to handling typical secretarial chores for the vice president of marketing, I was in charge of compiling the monthly sales reports, using figures provided by members of the field sales force. I also was given responsibility for doing various market research activities.
New Orleans Convention and Visitors Bureau, 1995-1998, summers, tour guide. During the summers of my college years, I led tours of New Orleans for tourists visiting the city. My duties included greeting conventioneers and their spouses at hotels, explaining the history and features of the city during an all-day sightseeing tour, and answering questions about New Orleans and its attractions. During my fourth summer with the bureau, I was asked to help train the new tour guides. I prepared a handbook that provided interesting facts about the various tourist attractions, as well as answers to the most commonly asked tourist questions. The Bureau was so impressed with the handbook they had it printed up so that it could be given as a gift to visitors.
University of Louisiana, 1995-1998, part-time clerk in admissions office. While I was a student in college, I worked 15 hours a week in the admissions office. My duties included filing, processing applications, and handling correspondence with high school students and administrators.
EDUCATION: BA degree in biology. University of Louisiana, 1998. Graduated with a 3.0 average. President of Panhellenic League.